Nowadays children watch a lot of tv and playing video games. However some people think that these activities are not good for child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

I actually agree with
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point of view.Nowadays children are addicted to electric divorces and it is the most important thing of their life.Not only children, of course, but adults and teenagers are
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teenagers are like it too and do
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affectionate of activity.I saw an oflot community who are addicted to
this
action, and it is a really bad influence on our energy .
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of ,all we can hurt our mental well-being ,for ,
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, a lot of crowds are isolated in their homes and like to be alone, they will be methanotrophs after that.Mithantrophia is a kind of illness in which society is isolated from others and does not want to watch them , methanotrophs prefer to live alone with their electronic devices .There is a lot of reasons why the nation can not go out to play with some children ,often
this
is the cause of their mental energy .If a child is shy or can not do the same action they prefer to stay at home , isolate themselves from others and play video games or watch television .I think it is quite bad , and we must help
this
affectionate community. folk are must not forget who are they and do kinds of exercise that do not hurt their mental fitness.Remember we can buy a clock but not asleep,with money we can buy a bed but not asleep ,with money we can buy products but not our appetite ,with money we can buy everything but not our mental well-being!
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