Nowadays children watch a lot of tv and playing video games. However some people think that these activities are not good for child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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, a lot of crowds are isolated in their homes and like to be alone, they will be methanotrophs after that.Mithantrophia is a kind of illness in which society is isolated from others and does not want to watch them , methanotrophs prefer to live alone with their electronic devices .There is a lot of reasons why the nation can not go out to play with some children ,often

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affectionate community. folk are must not forget who are they and do kinds of exercise that do not hurt their mental fitness.Remember we can buy a clock but not asleep,with money we can buy a bed but not asleep ,with money we can buy products but not our appetite ,with money we can buy everything but not our mental well-being!

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

265 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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