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More and more people nowadays have to compete with younger people for the same job. What problem does this cause? what are some possible solutions?

#people #job
The accompanying graph gives the breakdown of
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 popularity from different age categories in the US. It covers the period between 2000 to 2011. At
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.it is noticeable that there was a sudden surge in watch hours in 2008 and it accelerated upwards from 2009 onwards. To take an in-depth look, the most noticeable information is that , there was a dramatic improvement in audience by adolescents and the viewers moved from a fifth to just over two quarters with few mild drops in between. Another calibration worth considering is the tripled demand from kids and it hiked from 10% in 2000 to almost a
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minimal growth was shown by adults and their interest was hiked by only 10% over
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time. Not only that, the watch overs from youth moderately rose till 2007 and started showcasing fluctuating trend till it reached the same percentage as kids by 2011.
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  • Job satisfaction
  • Mental and emotional well-being
  • Stress
  • Depression
  • Financial instability
  • Quality of life
  • Job dissatisfaction
  • Career goals
  • Skills and experiences
  • Networking opportunities
  • Social isolation
  • Productivity
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