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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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coffee
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tea
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 consuming habits in the
last
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 4 weeks with the percentages of people living in different cities in Australia,
such
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 as
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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. We can observe that people living in the
center
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 areas of cities in Australia are likely to drink and buy
instant
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coffee
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 more than fresh
coffee
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. The
populations
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 who dwell in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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 drink and buy fresh
coffee
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 43%, 42%, 33%, 34%, and 38% of other
city
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residents
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, the
populations
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 who love to drink and buy
instant
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coffee
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 have 43%, 42%, 33%, 34%, and 38% in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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 respectively.
Moreover
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, the information shows that people living in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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, and
Hobart
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 like to go to a café for purchasing
coffee
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 and
tea
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 more than
instant
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coffee
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. By calculating differentiated percentages of
populations
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 purchasing
coffee
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 or
tea
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 compares
populations
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 drinking
instant
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coffee
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 more than 21 % for
city
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residents
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 in
Sydney
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, 23 % for
city
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residents
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 in
Melbourne
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, 4 % for
city
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residents
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 in
Brisbane
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, and 8 % for
city
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residents
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 in
Hobart
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.
On the contrary
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, the
populations
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 buying
instant
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coffee
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 compares
populations
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 deciding to buy
coffee
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 or
tea
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more
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 than 3 % for
city
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residents
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 in
Adelaide
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.
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