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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have to
work
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 in order to earn the money to feed the family. In
this
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 essay, we’ll talk about whether it’s better to
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 for the same
organization
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 or
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organization
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.
To begin
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 with, Working in the same
organization
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 is good.
You’ll
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 be a key person and know a lot of
thing
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 about the
company
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.
You’ll
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 know the procedure of the
company
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 so that you can
work
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 fast.
However
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, being in the same environment,
you’ll
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 never see how other
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company
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work
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.
You’ll
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 have a narrow point of view and that could be a problem when there’s a complicated job. From my point of view, the
salary
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 is not increased much when you’re in the same
company
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.
On the other hand
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, working in
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 different
company
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 will require you to start over when you move to
different
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company
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. Each
company
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 has their own working procedure. Even though you are professional at the old
place
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, moving to the new one will require you to start from zero. After you know how the
company
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run
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, you can use your experience combined with the knowledge you learned from
new
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a new
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place
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 to maximize the
work
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 quality in the new
place
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. In most cases, moving to the new
place
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 usually give you much more
salary
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 from the old one so you can increase your
salary
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 dramatically. In conclusion, Working in the same
organization
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 can be good if you don’t want to start over again.
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, In my opinion, I prefer to
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 in
the
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 different
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organization
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 over time because
you’ll
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 gain more knowledge and know-how and the
salary
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 can be increased significantly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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