As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

Ageing is a process that will give you an opportunity to change your views and opinions . when a small child becomes an adult , he or she
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be more mature in ideas and a more responsible person than earlier and
this
writer believes that
this
is a positive development because there will be less risky behaviours and less burden for the family when a youngster
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an adult.
To begin
with , when we consider the main differences between children and adults , maturity and the understanding of the world is the main point that adults
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to
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young
child
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furthermore
, with ,maturity they may be able to make decisions about themself and about society by measuring the weight of the good and bad of that decision.
For instance
,
according to
the law system in most countries, persons
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than 18
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their own decisions like in politics, marriage and especially about their life. At the same time , they would take responsibility of their self and others and
this
would be an important development for them to live as an individual person in the future.
for example
,
according to
an annual report of the Sri Lankan Central Bank in 2020, the majority of the road traffic accidents in the country in that year
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caused by teenagers and interestingly, with the increasing age , the number of accidents
also
less.
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, it is obvious that when someone is maturing it would be a definite benefit for society. In conclusion, when we consider the ageing process, as children become adults their behaviour
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responsibility and accountability will increase and they will take fewer risks for their
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as well as
other people's
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