As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?
Ageing is a process that will give you an opportunity to change your views and opinions . when a small child becomes an adult , he or she
would
be more mature in ideas and a more responsible person than earlier and Wrong verb form
will
this
writer believes that this
is a positive development because there will be less risky behaviours and less burden for the family when a youngster become
an adult.
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becomes
To begin
with , when we consider the main differences between children and adults , maturity and the understanding of the world is the main point that adults are having compare
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children
furthermore
, with ,maturity they may be able to make decisions about themself and about society by measuring the weight of the good and bad of that decision. For instance
,according to
the law system in most countries, persons more
than 18 Fix the agreement mistake
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can Correct your spelling
years
take
their own decisions like in politics, marriage and especially about their life.
At the same time , they would take responsibility of their self and others and Correct your spelling
make
this
would be an important development for them to live as an individual person in the future. for example
, according to
an annual report of the Sri Lankan Central Bank in 2020, the majority of the road traffic accidents in the country in that year was
caused by teenagers and interestingly, with the increasing age , the number of accidents Correct subject-verb agreement
were
also
less. Hence
, it is obvious that when someone is maturing it would be a definite benefit for society.
In conclusion, when we consider the ageing process, as children become adults their behaviour and
responsibility and accountability will increase and they will take fewer risks for their Correct word choice
apply
life
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lives
as well as
other people's life
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