In many countries, more and more people are becoming jobless. What problems do you think this will cause to individuals and the society? What measures should be taken to reduce the level of unemployment among youngsters

Unemployment is a serious threat to the modern economy. The current youth faces the problem of lack of job very vividly worldwide.
This
essay will delve into both the consequences and remedies of
out
Add a missing verb
being out
show examples
of a job.
To begin
with, if there is no productive youth in a country, it will not have any significant growth in the future.
This
is because young
people
are the tender buds of
idea
Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
show examples
and creativity. Without their help, the developments get staggered. In fact, the young adults will not be able to find financial support
nor
Correct word choice
or
show examples
support their families.
This
will lead to
breakdown
Add an article
a breakdown
show examples
, mental depression and anxiety among
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
teenagers.
Moreover
, the individuals turn into criminals due to
this
background. Somalia is a clear cut example for
this
case. Their pirates hijacked ships and started robbery of commodities for their survival. But what happened
afterward
Change the spelling
afterwards
show examples
is really terrifying.
People
run out of food, shelter and money & eventually become offenders and
this
can pass over generations
also
. For a society, unemployment leads to serious issues. When left with no work,
people
tend to migrate to other places which provide them with employment, better opportunities and livelihood.
As a result
, the community over there shatters and even the country thrive to survive. Apart from these numerous problems, the issues can be resolved by the timely action of
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
and various
NGO's
Change noun form
NGOs
show examples
. The government should provide their individuals with sufficient job opportunities and
also
practical
Add an article
a practical
show examples
approach
Fix the agreement mistake
approaches
show examples
to different fields during
the
Change the word
their
show examples
time of
study
Add an article
the study
show examples
.
Furthermore
, other organisations can make the
people
of a depressed country aware
about
Change preposition
of
show examples
the positive aspects of migration. To sum up, unemployment has many
life threatening
Add a hyphen
life-threatening
show examples
problems and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
timely remedies should be adopted to minimise the consequences.
Submitted by josestephy1 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: