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Your local public library wants improvement to their services and facilities .In order to get ideas from the public , they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian.In your letter. . describe what you like about the library . say what you don't like . make suggestions for improvements

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Hi Dear, My name is Sonia. I am a member of your library. There are many facilities available in the library and I like most of them. Collections of the
books
 are
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 bookstore
such
 as historic notes, psychology, music data etc. The design
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 the information building is amazing and we can read the
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book wherever
 we want.
Moreover
,
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 inlibrariesies increase
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number
 of visitors.
On the other hand
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 things that
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 do not like about
this
 place. Sometimes, we have to take the
books
 with us but the guardian
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 not allow us to do that.
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 does not have access to keep the
books
 related to subjects. I tried to find some topics but could not find that. I have some suggestions for the library. You have to keep more and more collections of
books
 and students or the public should have access to all opportunities of
this
 place. With regards Sonia
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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