Some people think that employers should not be concerned about how employees dress at work but the quality of work only. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the years the way employees dress has been considered
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. Even though, some people believe that company directors must not worry about what their workers wear but focus on the quality of their job others think the opposite.
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opinion to an extent because
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may enable good
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outcomes but improper dressing may lead to poor morals at a
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.
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, many employees perform better when they are dressed in what makes them comfortable,
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how fast they are able to achieve tasks.
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most companies that have recorded quality
work
results by their staff are those that allow them to wear what brings out the best in them.
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enables pleasant task achievements.
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attaining their goals at a good rate, most staff may tend to behave immorally towards each other because of improper dressing, Even people that visit these facilities might not respect
such
workers.
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if health workers were not instructed to wear
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attires when attending to patients these unwell individuals may not be willing to take the
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instructions seriously because of
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of respect towards them.
This
is why dress code is a very important factor at a
work
facility. To conclude, I don’t agree completely that employers should not worry about what their staff wear just because they are able to achieve goals better, but think that allowing
such
conduct may attract immorality and disrespect.
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