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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Some
people
 argue that television and computer
games
 are
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of
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the elements that lead to
violence
 and it has influenced seriously
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society
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 nowadays. Other
people
 believe that
violence
 comes from the
behavior
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 of
people
. In my opinion, I completely agree with the
first
 view because now there are more and more violent films and
games
 emerging rampantly which can make many young adults and even
children
 imitate, and influence the future of them On the one hand, there are compelling reasons why some
people
 think that
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behavior
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 is the main factor causing
violence
. A study
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sows
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 that 10% of
children
 who suffered from domestic
violence
 tend to be very cruel , violent and have a dip future . That
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 that the
behavior
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 of parents is very crucial for their
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children
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 because parents are considered as a mirror that they can imitate.
On the other hand
, there are a number of reasons that can show the serious impact of
violence
 by aggressive movies and computer
games
 A study shows that 20% of
children
 aged 5-16 are playing many kinds of
games
 involved in fighting, even stabbing and killing. when they are in the reality, those
children
 tend to be
crul
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cruel
 and have many violent activities with other
people
 like their peers and even their parents,
Additionally
, nowadays there are more and more cases involved in illegal, happened by young adults because of
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 to action films and violent
games
 heavily.
As a result
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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