Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Our world’s official
language
is
English
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therefore
people and the government choose to
study
and teach the
language
, so learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
is now normal for everyone,
according to
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there must be
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an advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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for able to speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
so where the place is not familiar to the foreign
language
such
as
English
, obsessed with
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their children to have
better
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a better
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life and be competitive.
This
system is concentrated in
specific
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a specific
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country
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countries
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such
as Asia. Being able to speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
is good
however
if
students
do not even fully comprehend their own
language
, I do
no
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think school should force them to
study
.
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increasing
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number
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the number
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of using
a
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cell
phone
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phones
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, teenagers use
slangs
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slang
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to communicate with their friends rather than using formal words. In Korea, for that reason, lack of literacy is
concern
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a concern
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,
students
do not have
ability
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the ability
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to comprehend the meaning of words. Despite the
fact
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students
are currently studying
English
on
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high
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a high
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level and absolutely they remember lists of vocabulary that they do not
understanding
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of it. There will
no
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meaning
of
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learning languages if they are not able to understand
they
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own
language
. While the problem is still highly growing,
student’s
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students’
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parents always desire their children to be
talent
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at everything. According to that many
students
are forced to
study
foreign languages after school lessons to earn
good
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a good
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mark
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marks
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on the school test,
that is
what
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why
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schools should stop
select
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English
ascompulsory
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as compulsory
compulsory
subject which parents and
student
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students
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have no choice to stop
study
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studying
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on
second
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language
.
Nevertheless
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even schools do not choose
English
as
compulsory
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a compulsory
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subject,
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the student
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student
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students
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will have less pressure
on
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to
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study
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the study
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the
language
they do not understand , and in the future people who need the
language
will choose to
study
by their own choice. In conclusion, I believe that the government will have
smart
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a smart
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choice
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choices
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for student’s future and think
where
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about where
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students
can spend their potential rather than focusing on foreign
language
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languages
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.
However
, we
cannt
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can't
can not
deny
about
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the fact that
English
is
also
important for some people, we will need to
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