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Some people think that only managers should make decisions in the company.while others think that employees should be involved in the process of decision making.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Certain individuals urge that, only the supervisor can make
decisions
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 in an organization,
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, others and myself included, think that
workers
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 should be involved in making the
decisions
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 in an organization.
Body paragraph 1
One of the major reasons why some believe that business issues that require decision-making should be left
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 administrators is due to its effectiveness and convenience when done by them.Because when superintendents finalize business matters, people take
initiatives
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 faster as there is no room for burden in times of failure.
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, it blends in we'll and minimize employees' resistance since they have to
co operate
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 and obey plans imposed on them with no questions asked.
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, research that was done in 2005, revealed that production soared in
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 of
companies
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 where dictatorial was
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 in African
companies
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 manufacturing cars. All in all,
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companies
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 where managers have the final say production is faster and more accurate.
Body paragraph 2
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, some people and I, opine that staff members should be allowed to have a hand decision-making process at work for innovation and success.
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,
workers
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 feel that they are part of an organization when involved and
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 leads to greater acceptability of
decisions
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 made leading to its success.
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, in a horticulture factory that sells flowers, following brainstorming ideas from the workforce, they concluded that the fasted means of transport was air, to deliver perishable faster to the distant destination,
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 ,
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 was made possible by team cooperation and spirit.
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,
companies
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' success lies in
workers
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' innovation and varied idea generation.
Body paragraph 3
To conclude,
although
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decisions
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 from management are accurate and faster, in my point of view, I agree with opposing views that
variety
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 of views from
workers
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, pulls it towards its goal.
Conclusion
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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