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Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #country #health #service #treatments
THE IMPORTANCE OF HEALTH SERVICE WAS ALWAYS DEBATABLW HAS NOW BECOME MORE CONTROVERSIAL WITH MANY PEOPLE CLAIMING THAT IT IS BENEFICIAL WHILE OTHERS REJECT
THIS
 NOTION. THE SUBSTANTIAL INFLUENCE OF
THIS
 TREND HAS SPARKED THE CONTROVERSY OVER
THE
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 POTENTIAL IMPACT IN RECENT YEARS .IN MY OPINION ,THE FORMER PROPOSITION APPEARS TO BE MORE RATIONAL.
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 ESSAY WILL
FURTHER
 ELABORATE
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 POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE EFFECTS AND
THUS
 WILL LEAD TO A LOGICAL CONCLUSION. TO COMMENCE WITH THE NEED
OF
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 SERVICES REGARDING
INTERNAL
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THE INTERNAL
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 BODY IS AS ESSENTIAL AS FOOD . AS WE PUT OUR FOOT TO AGE OF
60'S
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,WE NEED
MEDICINE
 WHICH SHOULD PROVIDE FREE OF charge . AS WE KNOW MOST OF THE PEOPLE LIVE UNDER THE POVERTY LINE ,LOW CLASS IS THE BIGGEST REASON , SO,
MEDICINE
 SHOULD BE PROVIDED BY LITIGATION AT LOW amount OR FREE OF value . ANOTHER REASON IS
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 PRICE OF
MEDICINE
 .
THE
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MOST OF THE MEDICINES ARE PREPARED FOR JUST OF $1,
HOWEVER
 ,WHEN
IT
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THEY
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 REACH TO THE MARKET
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 WILL COST TO THE CUSTOMER BY HIKING OF 40 TO 60 %. DUE TO THE CHAIN OF PRODUCER TO SELLER .
THUS
 ,GOVERNMENT SHOULD MITIGATE
THIS
 CHAIN .AFTER THAT OUR COUNTRY EARN MORE. AND MOST OF THE CHEMIST DRUGS SHOULD BE RETAINED BY LOCALS.
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NOT
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 DOUBT,
MANY
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THAT MANY
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 OF THE DRUGS IS COSTLY BUT
THIS
ALSO
 CAN BE DIMINISHED WITH
SAME
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 PROCESS.
MOREOVER
 ,ARRANGE FULL BODY
CHECK UP
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 EVERY SIX MONTHS AND GIVE
MEDICINE
 ON THE SUPPORT . TO
RECAPTULATE
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, ABOVE ALL MENTIONED REASONS ARE SUFFICIENT TO MINIMIZE THE PROBLEM OF HEALTH SERVICES .
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