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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: explain why you were at the restaurant describe the problems write about the action you want the manager to take

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about my recent bad experience at your restaurant. I went there with my family for dinner, unfortunately, they served bad-quality food with very poor services. I
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 to write
this
 for taking some
serios
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serious
 actions.
To begin
 with, I live near to your hotel and I planned for
outing
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 with my family. After that, I
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choose
choosed
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 your restaurant for dinner. We order some traditional foods and
also
 soup. Your employees from bottom to upper management were very
non professional
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. I would like to share some problems here which we faced there.
First
 of all,
you
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 order-taker came very late to take
order
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 even though all tables are empty
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 time.
Secondly
,
food
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the food
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 was old and observe
it
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easily by the smell.
Last
 but not least, we discussed
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to
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 your cashier at the time of payment, but his
responed
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response
 was very rude. To conclude, your restaurant is providing unhappy food and services. I want that you should take
an
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serious action about it and
also
pay-back
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 our money in the form of plenty.
Otherwise
, we will see you in
the
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court. I look forward
for
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 and kind response from you. Yours faithfully, XYZ
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