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Band 5.5

Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples.

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Nowadays, it can be seen that keeping
environment
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the environment
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 safe and healthy is a big task for the
govenment
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government
 services as well as for the people themselves. Well, it is believed that
whether
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apply
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the
use
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 of natural
resources
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 should be stopped or replaced by different energy
resources
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.
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, others argue that banning the
use
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 of essential
assests
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assets
 can highly affect the economical graph.
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,
i
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I
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 am unable to
suppport
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support
 any one point of view.
Lets
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Let's
Let us
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 discuss both the statements and get
on
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 the conclusion. On one hand, according to me
oil
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, gas and coal are counted as regular consuming essentials on
large
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a large
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 as well as normal scale. It would be like putting every task on pause without using them.
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- If
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oil rich
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oil-rich
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 country Saudi
Arab
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Arabia
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 stops exporting its
oil
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 products like petrol and diesel to other countries it will be effective for both exporter and importer by a huge economical loss. People will not be able to
use
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 their automobiles, big industries will stop working,
it
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and it
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 will be so tough for the folks to do even their day to day activities.
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 whole world will be shut down.
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, every natural resource has its own best property for which they are being used
anormously
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enormously
anonymously
.
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example
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 it would be
foolishness
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 to compare
oil
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 and water or coal and solar energy as they have totally opposite specialities. On other hand, There is not any doubt that natural
resources
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 are being used very
carelessely
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carelessly
 which is leading to
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a spoil
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spoil
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spoiling
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
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- forests are being cut down at
high
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a high
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 level to
accomodate
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accommodate
growing
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the growing
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 population.
This
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 deed is harming other vital activities like animal habitation,lack of
raining
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rain
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, soil quality etc. Harmful gases are being released through big factories which
is
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are
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 causing different illnesses like asthma, cancer,
thiroid
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thyroid
 and depression to the public. To summarise, In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 it is not possible to ignore the
use
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 of natural
resources
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 completely but it is highly recommended to
use
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 them carefully and wisely to prevent any big cause to current and forthcoming generation.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy sources
  • economic collapse
  • fossil fuels
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • alternative resources
  • clean energy
  • technological advancements
  • government subsidies
  • energy transition
  • reliability
  • job creation
  • economic benefits
  • global warming
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • innovation
  • infrastructure
  • regulatory framework
  • energy efficiency
  • climate resilience
  • decarbonization
  • socioeconomic impact
  • energy security
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