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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Over
time
, more and more
people
 prefer to
work
 for themselves rather than for someone else, like a company or organisation. The most important reason for
this
 situation is the feeling that
people
 create, they feel independent.
However
, being self-employed make them feel insecure, as long as they do not have a stable
income
. Obviously, being
the
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 employer of yourself makes you feel independent.
People
 can organise their
time
 and
work
 any
time
 they want, not a regular 9-5
work
.
Moreover
, they could set the price catalogue on their own,
therefore
 gaining more money.
For example
, my husband is a self-employed bricklayer, he selects the jobs that he wants to undertake, he determines the prices and until he finishes the job, he could
work
 as hard as he wants, he can even not go to
work
 for a day.
On the other hand
, not having a fixed
income
 makes
people
 insecure. Bills need to be paid every have
month
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,
thus
 a salary is really important.
Moreover
, if you have a basic salary, you can calculate and plan
the
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 expenses and
the
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savings and it is easier to schedule trips on your days off.
In addition
, being self-employed means that you could
work
 any
time
, even on your days off, you will think about
work
, or send an important e-mail,
as a
result
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 it will be hard to enjoy your free
time
. In conclusion, many
people
 choose to be self-employed, so they could plan their
time
 and their
income
 on their own, but
this
 can have disadvantages like not having a stable
income
 and not managing your
time
 properly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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