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Some people think government should spent money on measures to save languages with few speakers from drying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #measures #languages #speakers #waste #resources
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the accent is essential in day to day life to express thoughts and opinions of the community. Most of the community thinks that union bodies should provide finances to protect a few native speakers eradicating while it is a waste of financial resources. In
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 I will discuss both the views and why I believe it is much needed to conserve these
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. Every tradition has its own vocabulary and its importance. We see
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 kind of public in rural areas there are peculiar in their
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. Whereas more crowd are not of it.
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., before declaring
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Telangana
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separate
 state, people used to speak in
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language
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. Later, with government support speakers created awareness and now
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 a Telangana state
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.
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 few people
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 that it is a waste of finances.
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 leads to
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 of
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. People are more prone to only
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 specific
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. In
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 we need to teach
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youngsters as a
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 stelling in schools.
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 is an art of
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communication
. I believe every
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 should be protected.
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