Some people think that children who spend alot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every
children
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likes to read comic
books
,But it is considered by many that the pupil should not read a
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of
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storybook
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book
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books
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,it is waste of time.
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of
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a book
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books
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book
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they should do some
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adventure
activities.I disagree with the notion
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a large extent,my viewpoint will be elaborated
further
.
To begin
with, there are many merits of reading,the foremost one is reading a
story
books
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early age will improve a child"s
learnig
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learning
ability.To
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explain
it,regarding it they can learn a new vocabulary new words,
also
improve reading speed.Stduent can improve grammer skill.
Moreover
,reading makes them a good
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decision
maker
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as well as
it
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gives
a lots
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of knowledge.
For example
, the famous writer Luis mark had read
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thousands of
books
in
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their childhood
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after
that
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he becomes a good writer.
Furthermore
,
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a story
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story
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storybook
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book
gives
a
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peace of mind. Explicate it,after
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day studying subjects
such
as science,history as well as math they tired.
Hence
,comic
books
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them
relax
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and fresh.
For instance
, a majority of pupils have found that comic
books
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them more happiness rather
then
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an outdoor activities
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outdoor activities
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.
On the other hand
,it has some demerits.
Firstly
if a child does not know
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reading method and put
book
near eyes it might be
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a damage eye
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and
couse
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cause
of glasses.
Also
, the result
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affected by
a
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too much reading,if they would put all times on
story
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they cannot put focus on school subjects.
For instance
,
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was revealed in past 60% of
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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are
spendig
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spending
more 5 hours on reading comedy
books
they get
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marks in exams. To sum up, many people find it
story
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storybook
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book
is not
a
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good for students,it can take.But I largely believe that it is the best way to get relax
as a result
, it gives lots of knowledge,vocabulary,
learnig
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learning
skill.
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