Some people think that getting old is a negative thing, whereas others think it is much easier for people to live in modern society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that becoming old is a drawback in contemporary society as they cannot adapt to a new environment.
However
, regarding
this
, others assert that
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life
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old
people
is getting easier since they are wiser than
younsters
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youngsters
.
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essay will outline why they support both sides and suggest factors that should be taken into consideration. On the one hand, since older
people
's bodies are increasingly weak, they are not able to adapt to a fast-paced world. Despite
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the fact that various electronic devices and
machinary
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machinery
has been invented by cutting-edge technology,
elders
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lives have
beome
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become
more complicated as it is hard to learn new changes for them.
For example
, recent media in Korea reports that almost 40% of seniors give up
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how to use
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electronic
devices because it is hard to see small letters on a tiny screen, and they tend to easily become tired owing to a
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blue light
. As the example clearly illustrates, getting old means an
unefficient
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inefficient
means of adapting to contemporary society.
On the other hand
, since the old has lived longer than the young, they ease to interact with others wisely. Due to the development of technology, the way how to communicate with others has changed, thereby leading to communication issues
such
as cyber-threatening and cyber-bullyings. Regarding
this
, a significant number of young
people
are
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concerned
about the difficulties of relationships. In terms of
this
, as old
people
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already experienced a lot of things in their lives, they know what
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up being
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meaningful
and pointless.
However
, I believe that it is hard to live in
this
day and age for all age groups.
Hence
, if they support each other, they can easily live
this
era. What is more, it can reduce the generation gap between the old and the young.
For instance
, while
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teach old
people
how to operate each machine, seniors can tell wise stories to teens in order to overcome bullying.
Therefore
, it is reasonable to point out that being old with help might be not a matter to live
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modern society. In conclusion, while I accept that living in
fast-paced
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world is difficult for all age groups including old
people
, there is no doubt to point out that helping each other can be a key factor in living easily.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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