Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country rather than living as a separate minority group with different lifestyle. Do you agree or disagree?

Different kind of
culture
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is help
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to learn something new and live with happiness. Few
people
argue
,
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the
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people
should accept the new foreign
culture
on behalf of
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alone or separate. I
am totally agree
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with
this
statement, and I will discuss
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upcoming
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paragraphs.
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with, new
culture
and
new
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lifestyle
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the
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enjoyment and happiness
with
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different
people
.
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, nowadays many
of
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people
as well as students
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are going to
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overseas countries for higher education and work. If they
not
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do not
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accept their
culture
so,
maybe
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possible too hard to live. Because,
there
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atmosphere and festivals, all are different
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from
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form
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from
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us. So
that
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,
people
should adopt
the
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foreign festivals. Apart from
this
, many countries
has
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own festivals and
culture
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cultures
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.
For instance
,
Indian
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the Indian
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culture
of
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the festival
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festival
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festivals
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are
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totally different and fully enjoyable like Diwali,
holi
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, and makarshankranti.
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many
of
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abroad
people
to
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visit
the
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India and enjoy our festival. So
this
is
good
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sign for,
built
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a better relationship between the two countries.
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, many
of
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foreign
person
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people
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are domesticating our Indian religion.
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illustrate,
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number of
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Indian
people
believe in
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Vaishnav
Vaisnava
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religion.
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,
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simultaneously some foreign
people
like Russian and Canadian
person
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people
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also
adopt the
vaisnav
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Vaishnav
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religion because
of
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, in
this
culture
,
people
get
internal
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soothing and
happiness
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life. To conclude, many
of
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culture
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or
festival
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festivals
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give to peaceful
ambiance
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ambience
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and soothing life, so
people
must adopt
the
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different
culture
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for
great
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a great
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life.
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