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Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this opinion.

For centuries,
language
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is
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 the major source of communication.It is argued that the annual extinction of many languages is not a problem because having few languages will lead to a more convenient life.I totally disagree with
this
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 statement which will affect the country's
culture
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.The below essay will elucidate the importance of
language
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 to
culture
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,followed by a conclusion.
To begin
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 with,
language
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 is not a group of spoken words,it represents someone's
culture
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.
Language
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 has evolved thousands of years to reflect what it means to a particular place.
For instance
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, the Irish
language
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 consists of a wide range of vocabulary in the world and reflects their tradition of storytelling, but now
English
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 has become the first
language
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 in Irish because it is easy to communicate with the world.Many books were written in the native
language
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such
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 as Gita is written in the Sanskrit
language
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 many people don't know about the Sanskrit
language
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.
Moreover
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, speaking
English
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 and Chinese will alienate more people around the world.
English
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 may be common,but it takes years to acquire it.Some countries like Korea and Vietnam
are
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 trying to adopt
English
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 as a second
language
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 for a long time, but ,
still
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 some people cannot grasp it.
However
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, For a long ,time
English
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 has been a
language
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 for business and it should be encouraged to help a country become more economically competitive.
To conclude
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,
come
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spoken languages may make life better; yet
this
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 should not be an expense for less relevant dialects in order to avoid the country's tradition,
culture
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 and alienation
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many countries.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Provide a clear introduction and conclusion to frame the essay. Outline the main points you will discuss in the body paragraphs to guide the reader through your arguments.
Task Achievement
Focus on providing relevant and comprehensive ideas that directly address the task question. Use specific examples to support your arguments and ensure each paragraph contributes to the overall task response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Endangered languages
  • Homogenization
  • Multilingualism
  • Language preservation
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Global communication
  • Intellectual diversity
  • Ecological knowledge
  • Cultural traditions
  • Communication barriers
  • Preservation efforts
  • Technological solutions
  • Language revival
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