A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. (To what extent do you agree or disagree?)

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, I highly agree that we are losing the main morals. In our community, showing off is how people do
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social media grows up and some famous started to blow in about what they have as
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, bags, clothes and so on.
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human being put an end to
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who they are and jump to be arrogant, selfish and
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fortunate, while are not what we see. To illustrate, some people buy an expensive mobile phone and, in the end, when they really need money
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pay the necessary things do not have, so they go to the bank to take a loan. Above all, is really common to see the perfect and happy
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, in spite of the reality
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completely different, for the reason that, usually living for someone is boring and always being ungrateful for the things that they have. As I mentioned before, it made them egocentric, in
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dying because do not have food and water
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and is really needy,
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we saw postings about a serious subject on social
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that in
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sphere the person is only acting.
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mental health
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how social
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humanity is being and it influence
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mental health. For
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stop being addicted to social
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how the “perfect
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a highly valuable for yourself.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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