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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel. In the letter describe the problem at the hotel explain what the manager had said at the time say what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to request your compensation
due to
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 my unpleasant stay in one of your resorts
last
 month. I was at the Blue Panorama Hotel located on Varadero Beach. It is a very good place to spend the holidays and a friend of mine recommended to me to stay there. Even though the resort has a good qualification on the
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 web my experience there was horrible. I could not rest properly in the morning because of the terrible noise from the central heating system, and because of ,that I got a persistent migraine. I asked the manager to act on
this
 matter and he promised to fix the problem as soon as possible. Unfortunately, one day after that he told me the repair crew was unavailable that week. After my check out, the manager apologized and promised me monetary compensation for the terrible inconvenience. I am still waiting for
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 response from the manager. I would like to receive any indemnity because of
this
 problem. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Miguel Vanterpool Hector.
Submitted by mvanterpoolhector on

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Task Response
Ensure that the letter includes all necessary details as per the task. Describe the problem, explain the manager's response, and state your request clearly.
Greeting and Closing
Improve the greeting and closing to maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize the ideas into separate paragraphs to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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