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Band 3.5

You are Dimitar Borisov/Elena Borisova. You do not feel your school is doing enough to give the students access to and knowledge of computers. Write a formal letter to your head teacher, Mr Page, suggesting ways to improve access to IT resources in your school. In your letter: • suggest the formation of a lunchtime and/or after-school computer club; • propose ways to improve the facilities available (e.g. replacing old and outdated equipment, etc.); • outline the potential benefits of these changes. Start and finish the letter in an appropriate way.

Dear
Mr.
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 Page, I am writing
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 letter with the intent of suggesting ways of improving the access of students to computers.
Firstly
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, the school can start an after school computer club.
This
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 way, students that wish to learn more about the IT sector, will be given the needed resources to learn on their own.
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, the school can replace the old and outdated equipment with
new
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a new
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one
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. As programs get more advanced, the need
of
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 more powerful computers becomes more
aparant
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apparent
.
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 may be an expensive
endevour
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endeavour
 but it will
definitllly
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definitely
 be worth it. I hope that you look
throug
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through
 these ideas and give me
a
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feedback on
what
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your thoughts
.
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 As technology improves and
get
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 implemented in everyday life, the need of knowing how to use
a computers
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computers
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 becomes more of a
nessecity
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necessity
. Yours
sincirly
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sincerely
, Dimitar Borisov

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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