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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is neccessary to help them learn this distinction To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Issues related to
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 are crucial for
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these days. It is argued that
children
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 learn the difference between right and wrong when they are youngster by the
punishment
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 which help them learn
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 distinction.
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, what kind of
punishment
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 which
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should use to discipline their
children
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 to have good
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. I completely agree with
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 issue because of several reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The principal reason to consider is that punishing
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 a crucial thing that
parents
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 should do when they discipline their
children
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. To explain, youngsters do not know common sense about what
behaviour
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 is right
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 and what is bad
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. Lead to
parents
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 who are close to their
children
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 should teach them when they express bad
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 or do wrong things
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 as youngster who do not eat their
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 when
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 time reach,
parents
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 should punish them by do not give
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 to
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 when the time for
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 is pass.
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children
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 can learn that when the time for eating is reached, they should eat their
food
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.
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, some opponents may argue that
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 should not be punished by their
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 or
teachers
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 since they can learn by their experience
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what is good
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 or bad
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 when they grow up.
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this
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 viewpoint has validity on the surface, what opponents overlook is youngsters not only always need some suggestions from their
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 but
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 need to educate
them
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to express good
behaviour
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 in the family area and in society.
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, there are a variety of types of
punishment
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 that
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should use to discipline their
children
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 for good
action
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.
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,
action
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punishment
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 should do to
children
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 who do not obey their
parents
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.
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, psychological
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. All things considered,
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 there are some people who believe that
children
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 should not be punished by
parents
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 and
teachers
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, I totally agree with punishing
children
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 due to the fact that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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,
parents
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 and
teachers
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 can give them knowledge about what is good
behaviour
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 or bad
behaviour
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 by
action
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 and psychological
punishment
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.

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