Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies or interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today, employers often ask individuals looking for jobs for personal
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as their favourite entertainment, the things they like in their free time and whether they are married or single,…
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some
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believe that personal
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can be useful for employers, others including me would argue that their
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should not be asked
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One disadvantage of asking for personal
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is when an employer is biased towards some
people
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because of their religion or hometown. The consequence of it is likely to be that personnel feel a sense of injustice so they lost work ethic and progress in the
workplace
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Or it can even create a clash in religious beliefs and have effects on staff’s health
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in my country, when I went to do a job interview, the interviewer asked me about my religion. Even though, I did not know the motive behind the question, since I had a minority religion I did not feel well. Another disadvantage is that
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some
people
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do not like to share their personal
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with others and to
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keep them secret. The consequence of it is likely to be that
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personnel
feel a sense of injustice so they lost work ethic and progress Or it can even create a clash in religious beliefs and have effects on
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’s health. Some
people
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think that asking for
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could be useful for employers, as they understand the personality types of their future employees.
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, they choose them in the sections that are matched
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their personality. For
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, if we ask
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someone’s free time activities and they tell us that he like sports, we can recognize that they are quite active and suitable for a section that needs active personnel
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as mechanical jobs
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, competence and being versatile are most important in the
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. In conclusion, In my opinion, asking for personal
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is likely to create problems in
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workplace
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the workplace
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, some
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do not like to share their personal
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. In the
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experience and competence come
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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