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Global environment issues are the responsibility of rich nations not of poorer nations. Do you agree with this opinion?

#environment #responsibility #nations
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 problems have been analysed across the world.Developed countries are working rigorously to resolve climate issues.On the other side, developing countries are unable to concentrate
due to
 insufficient funding.I admit,it is equal responsibility to look into the global warming concern by all the nations.
However
,wealthy communities can spend more money than poorer ones.
This
 essay will discuss and clarify to focus more on the motherlands by some possible remedies.
Firstly
,there are so many challenges in deprived states.
For instance
,unemployment,crime ratios and poverty must be reduced
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 a priority than atmospheric hurdles.
Due to
this
,substandard nations cannot invest to filter the inline concerns of scenery.
However
,the authorities can motivate the people who wish to work free of cost to figure out the circumstances of their surroundings.I agree,that the government is the main front door to initiate the possible solutions for it.
In addition
, it became no option for them to fulfil the basic needs of pupils.
For instance
,a huge population need job opportunities,food and shelter to survive mainly than these ambience issues.Still,they can contribute to preserving and maintaining environmental activities.
Secondly
,powerful countries are sorted in terms of businesses,career scopes and daily requirements.To illustrate,japan invented an electric vehicle which eradicated
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harmful gases and nurtured the zones.Most of the industries are using electric transportation to save the environment.Obviously,financially sound nations can target the controversies related to the forecast.In my view,they should inaugurate the projects globally,so it could support avoiding accidental conditions
such
 as floods,earthquakes and intense temperature
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 happening yearly across the globe.
Moreover
,wealthy regions can assist with a partial amount of money for the sick zones.
Consequently
,it would build the relationships between them
as well as
 eliminate the lack of funding problems.It would result in stabilising or minimising the risk of increasing global warming.
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,moneyed lands must stand up for the poor public being economically strong.Internationally bonding within the world can assure the safety of the habitat. Developing communities can
also
 figure out the mother nature maintenance at early stages with the manual activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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