Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, school should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Student

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should not be forced to

study

an additional

language

, because the younger generation

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not capable to

study

an additional

language

. I agree with

this

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because I think the young can feel tough in studying. In spite of some people says it’s important to learn a

second

language

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important capability of languages for global life. On the one hand, some people insist

students

have to

study

language

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from

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form

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another country when they

younger

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are younger

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. Parents of the young would like to think it’s helpful

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kids. They think it’s more

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study

second

language

earlier when

students

are younger. If the

students

are able to learn another

tongue

, they will have a variety of

choice

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about their jobs and life.

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the other hand, there is

argument

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an argument

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the younger generation should not be forced to learn an additional

language

Students

are not capable to speak another

tongue

. The younger even can not speak their mother

tongue

fluently. If they are forced to

study

language

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languages

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, they will feel pressure from learning a variety of languages. It could

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lack

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and

actually

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was experience

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that.

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school should

encourages

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students

practice

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particularly in their mother

tongue

. In my opinion,

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school

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schools

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should not force the younger generation to

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. The young are not capable to learn another

tongue

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School

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have to focus on teaching

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