Some people think that schools should stop teaching students by using books because students find them boring, and that children can learn from films, TV, video games and computer instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One reason bringing negative
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learning
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the way of entertainment,like
TV
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show
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and computer games , is it will reduce children’s learning efficiency. The attraction of electron
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for students is too great, if young people use these products for
class
, they can hardly pay attention in the
class
.
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, the problem of being lazy secretly will
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students may do other things unless
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,
playing
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video games or
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TV series,
this
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class
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efficiency will decrease significantly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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