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Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The bar chart demonstrates the average number of
hours
 each day that
tourists
 from four different nationalities spent doing leisure activities when they are on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
Firstly
, Reading books seems to be one of the main activities that these
tourists
 do while on holiday.
For instance
. Chinese like to read books more than others and the difference is significant (8
hours
). The
second
 place belongs to American
tourists
 with 5
hours
.
Secondly
,
tourists
 from Brazil and Turkey like to spend some time on the beach in Greece as well (about 4 to 6
hours
) .
However
, the Chinese do not seem to be interested as much since they only spend 3
hours
 at the beach.
Thirdly
,
tourists
 from these four countries do not spend much time visiting different places and landmarks.
For example
, the Chinese have the least interest with an average of one hour and the Turkish and American
tourists
 have the highest interest in
this
 activity with an average of 3
hours
. To summarize,
tourists
 from four nationalities like to spend most of their time at the beach or reading books.
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