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Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The bar chart demonstrates the average number of
hours
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 each day that
tourists
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 from four different nationalities spent doing leisure activities when they are on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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, Reading books seems to be one of the main activities that these
tourists
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 do while on holiday.
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. Chinese like to read books more than others and the difference is significant (8
hours
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). The
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 place belongs to American
tourists
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 with 5
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.
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,
tourists
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 from Brazil and Turkey like to spend some time on the beach in Greece as well (about 4 to 6
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) .
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, the Chinese do not seem to be interested as much since they only spend 3
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 at the beach.
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,
tourists
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 from these four countries do not spend much time visiting different places and landmarks.
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, the Chinese have the least interest with an average of one hour and the Turkish and American
tourists
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 have the highest interest in
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 activity with an average of 3
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. To summarize,
tourists
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 from four nationalities like to spend most of their time at the beach or reading books.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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