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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the styles of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There exist
two
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 beliefs due to constructing
new
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buildings
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. the
first
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one
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 is insisting on keeping the old
style
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 of the previous houses, and the other
one
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 believes in freedom of the choice for construction
style
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 of new
buildings
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. Regarding the economical condition and aesthetics of the
city
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architecture
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,
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this
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 essay a moderation between
two
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 building styles would be the best choice. In the following
paragraph
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 both ideas are discussed and my opinion would be elaborated. On the
one
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hand
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 many people consider following the older
architecture
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 of the previous
buildings
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 would maintain the harmony of the
city
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, and
therefore
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it
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 beauty. For
further
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 explanation of the given opinion, we can delve into the regulations which were imposed on the building industry in some historical cities, for maintaining the ecosystem and the historical texture of the
city
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.
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, in
Isfahan
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,Isfahan
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 there are some new regulations for building apartments taller than 5 floors, in order to preserve the natural and historical harmony of the
city
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.
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, new construction projects are obliged to follow these rules, because of
natural
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 and historical resources of Isfahan.
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, some other believe that by constructing
building
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a building
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 in
the
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a
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 new form and
style
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, modernization can emerge in
one
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city
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, and helps its economy and
enviroments
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environment
environments
. There exist some cities
which their
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whose
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 old structure of
architecture
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 will not welcome new economical and residential
situation
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situations
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, due to the growth of the population and advent of the new technology.
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, they must try renovation in their construction. Dubai, as
very
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a very
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 advanced technological
city
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, could be an outstanding example. If the
muncipility
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municipality
 of Dubai had not hosted the new building
style
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, Dubai would have faced
sever
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severe
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 economical
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drawbacks
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draw backs
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drawbacks
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.
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 essay believes that depending on the circumstances and conditions of any
city
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, making a balance between the
two
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 decisions would be the best method. Considering the economical growth and
preserving
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preservation
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 the historical or natural sights, some regulations could contribute a
city
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to
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apply
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improve its status.
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 a
city
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 like
Nowshar
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Nowshera
 host many modern
buildings
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 with
exagarated
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exaggerated
architecture
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 in order to
prvoke
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provoke
 tourists into it.
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on
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 the other hand, constructing a building
which
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 does not follow the previous
style
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 of the
Nowshar
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Nowshera
 near the
coast line
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coastline
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, for preserving the resources is illegal. In conclusion, moderation between the
two
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opinion
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opinions
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of
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on
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 the building
style
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, whether following the old guidelines or a freer method, would be the best decision for any
city
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.
This
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 helps cities to improve both
in
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economical and
enviormental
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environmental
 conditions.
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