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Some people believe that having a job you enjoy is more important than earning a high salary. To what extentdo you agree or disagree?

There are 2 types of
people
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 in the
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 environment, some
people
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work
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 for money and,
on the other hand
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, some
work
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 because they love what they are doing. What if one decision was made, to stop giving salaries to
people
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 who love their
job
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? Would they continue working? I, personally, think that the answer would be no. Some
people
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 believe that having a
job
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 you enjoy is more important than earning a high
salary
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; they think that it is better for your mental health and lifestyle when your
job
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 is a positive part of the day where you go and enjoy each moment, unlike, forcing yourself on a
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 you hate only because it gives you a higher
salary
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. Others believe that a high
salary
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 is a necessity, they
work
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 only for high salaries to make sure they live
in
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 a certain social level and to meet their family and own needs. Personally, I believe that without a good
salary
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 that meets your
job
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 description perfectly,
by
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time
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 you will start feeling unmotivated and unvalued in
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job
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.
People
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 who studied and made effort in their lives to improve a skill or a talent they have, deserve to be valued so that they continue shining and giving more to their jobs.
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, you should keep in mind that each person has his own personal
life
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 which includes family needs, if you are married and have kids you must put them in good schools/ universities and
fulfill
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 all their needs and wants; not forgetting your own needs and wants as an individual person as well, so that you can have a balanced
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. You can’t be stressed at
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 and at home as well by not being able to live the
life
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 you deserve.
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, I think that all jobs whether you like it or not, all end up stressing at some point and hectic, so it is always important to feel valued. To wrap it up, of
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 it is nice to have a
job
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 you enjoy doing, but if you are good
in
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 doing something do not do it for free. Value is the key
of
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a
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successful
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work
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life
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 and
salary
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 is one of the value keys.

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