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In many workplaces, online communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#workplaces #communication #face #development
Connection via online websites become the
the
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most
populer
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popular
 method in our modern times. Communication to workplaces online is the easiest way
people
has
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have
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 preferred rather than
face
 to
face
.
This
 essay will discuss the
beneficial
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benefits
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 of
this
 development and why it
outweigh
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 of disadvantages. Several numbers of
people
 like to contact companies through simple way is provided to buying consume which make them stasifictied and relaxed to handle with a good company service. For
this
 reason, many workplaces have a competition over the best services they will offer to get positive feedback from their customers. The technology has improved usefully in order for many buying apps to give help fastly
for
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 example, amazon website
customer
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customers
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 can contact employees during the options are in setting or across to message them directly. In
this
 way,
people
 save time and receive quick answers
than
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they do not waste money to go to
face
 to
face
 meetings.
In addition
, That awards a good opportunity to workers who are busy with
job
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jobs
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 and
have
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 not enough time.
Then
, mothers with tiny babies can simply search for
this
 solution to make easy contact without going outside
home
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.
On the other hand
, that affects negatively
also
. it is impacting those
people
 who
is
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 not good to use online websites because they can namely fall into
fake
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the fake
a fake
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 page so which leads to stealing. In conclusion, The advantages of online communication depend on the situations and problems they may force
people
.
Then
, the
choosing
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 is followed to the handling position subject.
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