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the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cmparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cmparisons where relevant.
the charts
illustrating
Wrong verb form
illustrate
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 the changes in
property
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the property
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 of electrical appliances and contain
of
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apply
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time spent doing house
busines
Correct your spelling
business
 in housekeeper in one state from 1920 to 2019. in
this
Linking Words
Add a comma
,easy
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easy
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essay
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i
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I
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 am going to explain
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 charts in
details
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detail
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. on the one hand, in 1920 the percentage of households
in
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with
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refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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 was the lowest percentage 0% and
vacuum
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the vacuum
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 cleaner was 30%
while
Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
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washing machine was
hightest
Correct your spelling
highest
40
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at 40
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%. during the period
of
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between
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 1960 and 1980
Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
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refrigerator
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,refrigerator
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 rich
Correct article usage
the highst
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highst
Correct your spelling
highest
 percentage
100
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by 100
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%
while
Linking Words
 washing
machine
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machines
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 fall down
10
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by 10
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% and from 1980 to 2019 slighted going up.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the number of hours per week was
highest
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the highest
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 point in 1920 and
slight
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slightly
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 falls down 10% until 1960 and reminds going falling down by 5 % until 2019.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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