the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cmparisons where relevant.
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time spent doing house Remove the preposition
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business
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on the one hand, in 1920 the percentage of households Fix the agreement mistake
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with
refrigerator
was the lowest percentage 0% and Add an article
the refrigerator
vacuum
cleaner was 30% Add an article
the vacuum
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washing machine was Correct article usage
apply
hightest
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highest
40
%. during the period Change preposition
at 40
of
1960 and 1980 Change preposition
between
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refrigerators
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rich Add a comma
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the highst
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highest
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by 100
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machine
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machines
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