In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

It is said that in the past shopping was
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domestic task,
however
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they only buy
a
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things
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which
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necessary. while more and more folks
now a days
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nowadays
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regard
a
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shopping as a hobby.
This
essay will not only highlight that shopping is
positive
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a positive
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trend , but
also
give specific reasons.
Firstly
, In
this
era shopping is become a craze for
people
and all are
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by different
kind
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of things. A fashion
desiger
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designer
is growing up in the glamorous world.
For instance
, many individuals are making
there
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career in fashion
designing
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and
this
make
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makes
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a very big change in our country.
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, it is
very
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positive
develpoment
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development
for our nation because they are making
globally
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it globally
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and feel our country proud.
Secondly
, doing shopping
make
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makes
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a person healthy-wealthy.
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Moreover
,
now a days
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people
tend to do exercise and do their daily chores in
there
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their
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comfort zone, while shopping is
best
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the best
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theraphy
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therapy
for
people
to get active
this
way
atleast
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at least
they try to come out of
comfort
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their comfort
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zone and try to walk and burn their calories.
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, when we walk and
to
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up down on stairs that
also
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a
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one type of
exersice
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exercise
and
people
will do
without
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it without
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any
hestitaion
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hesitation
because shopping is very vital for
mankinds
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mankind
and they love to do it. In conclusion, I agree with
this
trend,
Although
its
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it
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make a very positive change for lazy
people
and
also
make
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makes
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them
physicaly
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physically
active.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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