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In many countries, people would rather rent a house instead of buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting

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Some people would rather rent a
house
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instead
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 of buying one. Renting a
house
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 is more flexible than buying a
house
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 in some cases, but
definitley
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definitely
 everything has advantages and disadvantages. Speaking about a student who travelled abroad to study for 4 to 5 years, it is better for him to rent a
house
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 rather than
buying
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buy
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 one due to it is not his home country and sudden changes are always expected.
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, when
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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 appeared, many students who were studying abroad went back to their home countries and chose to continue online to stay safe beside their families and loved ones. In
this
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 case, renting was a better choice.
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, the disadvantage of renting is that you will always be in
threat
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the threat
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 that the
house
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 owner would decide at
anytime
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 to give you a probation period to leave the
house
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, so you will not be
hundered
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hundred
percent
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 settled. In conclusion, Renting a
house
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 is more flexible for people because it gives them the privilege of being able to move and change areas easily; Unlike if you are the owner of the
house
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, you will have to sell it to be able to move each time, unless you are a billionaire and can buy houses
eveywhere
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everywhere
 you want to go.
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