Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

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, are both
responsibility
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for their
life
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expenses
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expences
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expenses
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specially
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,
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if they both work
in
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full time.
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paragraphs I would clarify my view when it comes to sharing between
men
and women.
First
, in old
societies
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the
men
only
working
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to feed their family but, nowadays , its completely change because
,
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women already have started to work
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time ago .
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high and
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cooperation . I strongly , believe the sharing between
men
and women
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necessary to afford
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modern
life
.
Men
coul
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could
not do it
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alone
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a lone
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it is quite difficult.
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, a lot of
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in 20
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century
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live as in the past . Simply (( sharing is caring)).
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