Completing university educationn is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some
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opine that having a higher degree in your field gives a surety of having a good job whereas other
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contradict
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having a good working
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skill set especially soft skills to have a successful career. In my opinion, companies hiring policies have been shifted from hiring employees with good educational backgrounds to those having a good
experience
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. I would support that person should be skilful than having multiple degrees to be successful in future. On the
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hand, As
education
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play a pivotal role, it is proven that having a good
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from a reputed school will guarantee a good job.
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, If a person is doing a
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in computer science from MIT, it will be easier for him to enter a job market right after graduation.
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, we can say that
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is the easy pathway toward professional growth.
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, As the world is moving towards digitalisation, things have changed, now companies not only prefer
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to have good theoretical knowledge but they
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should have a good working
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or required skill set.
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, If 2
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are interviewed for the same position,
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candidate only has a master's degree whereas the other candidate
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has a master's and professional skills with 2 years of working
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. So the company will surely prefer the
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with
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. In my opinion, companies hiring policies have been shifted from hiring employees with good educational backgrounds to those having a good
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. I would support that person should be skilful than having multiple degrees to be successful in future. In the conclusion, I reaffirm my statement that
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indeed
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plays a very important role in
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's life but now the world is demanding
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practical
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