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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are crippled by gridlocked traffic. What are the possible solutions for these cities?

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In developed countries, major
cities
 like New York,
London
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and London
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, people have a lot of options for buying a
car
. With
increase
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the increase
an increase
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 in purchasing power,
car
 ownership has increased
with
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by
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 leaps and bounds over the past three decades.
This
 has led to
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an increase
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increase
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increasing
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 in traffic congestion and air pollution in big
cities
.
Few
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A few
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 possible solutions to these problems are improvement in public transport and
government
 policies on
car
 ownership and office schedules. Public transport has always been reactive to the problems in
city
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the city
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, rather than being a well-planned system. It has been estimated that
population
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the population
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 in all major
cities
 will double in
next
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the next
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 25 years,
hence
 all big
cities
 of the world, should plan the city transport network for
next
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the next
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 30 years.
For example
, a country like Singapore has built their public
trasnport
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transport
 so effectively that it can cater to double the population in coming years.
Government
 policies will
also
 be required to be enforced to reduce
number
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the number
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 of cars on the road.
This
 can be done with
two-pronged
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a two-pronged
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 solution.
Government
 can limit
car
 ownership per family to 2
number
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numbers
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.
In addition
, office timings can be made flexible, or employees are encouraged to come to
office
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the office
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 between 7 am - 10 am. Of course, the compulsory daily working hours
needs
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need
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 to be followed, but
this
 will ensure that
employees
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employees'
employee's
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 travel to offices will be staggered,
thus
 reducing
amount
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the amount
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 of cars on the road. To sum it up, apart from the solutions mentioned in
this
 essay,
cities
 with traffic problems need to come up with additional unique ideas to solve the vehicle
congestions
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congestion
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. It is
also
 imperative that
,
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apply
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government
 bodies need to plan up to 2050 in regard to city
trasnport
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transport
 and network
system
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systems
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.
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