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Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems. What are the cause of this and what are some solutions.

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Since the beginning of human civilization,
individuals
 are trying their best to keep themselves fit. Some
people
 content that aged
people
 are now suffering from
lonliness
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loneliness
 and
heath
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health
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 problems as the
time
 has changed and everyone is busy in their own
work
.
To begin
 with, old age
people
 were more active in their past as they loved to spent
time
 with their
familiy
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family
.
However
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 in
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today's
todays
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today's
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 modern
era
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,era
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 everyone is busy
in
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with
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 their own
work
 because of which they are not able to give
time
 to their parents or grandparents. Due to which aged
individuals
 feel lonely and their physical health get weeker as they spend most of the
time
 in their home doing basic things which only helps them to spend
time
.
In addition
 to it , youths are busy
in
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exploring the gadgets and technology because of which they forget about the real world
which
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exists.
Moreover
,
individuals
 get busy in their
work life
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work-life
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 that they can not focus on
family
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the family
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 due to which parents and grandparents feel that their children are not able to give them
time
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the time
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 they should give. In the race of fulfilling all their needs
people
 have forgotten about the person who
are
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is
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 expecting them to spend some
time
 with them.
Thus
, old
people
 feel
lonly
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lonely
only
 and have
impact
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an impact
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 on both mental and physical health.
On the contrary
, there are various measures which can be taken to solve
this
problem
 like to get old age
people
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to enroll
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enroll
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enrol
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 themselves to
social
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a social
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 group which spend some
time
 discussing various things which will give them a good instinct that there is someone to talk with them.
Likewise
,
individuals
 who are working should maintain
work life
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work-life
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 balance which will give them
time
 to spend
time
 with elder
people
 and they can have some quality
time
.
Furthermore
, pupils should
disscuss
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discuss
 all the activities they did
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throughout
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through out
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throughout
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 the day and take old
people
 for a walk
everyday
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every day
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 which will help in maintaining their health and have a positive attitude that there
people
 with them to support them.
Thus
, there are various measures to overcome
this
problem
 and will help in solving
this
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the
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problem
. To conclude, the amount of stress in
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today's
todays
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today's
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 modern era has increased because of which parents and grandparents feel their children are not providing
time
 to the but taking necessary steps can help
sove
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solve
save
this
problem
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Happiness
  • Health
  • Exercise
  • Spending time
  • Loneliness
  • Health problems
  • Causes
  • Solutions
  • Lifestyle
  • Priorities
  • Social interaction
  • Physical activity
  • Advancements in technology
  • Promote
  • Engaging
  • Opportunities
  • Awareness
  • Family
  • Community
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