Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems. What are the cause of this and what are some solutions.
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content that aged people
are now suffering from lonliness
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loneliness
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problems as the Correct your spelling
health
time
has changed and everyone is busy in their own work
.
To begin
with, old age people
were more active in their past as they loved to spent time
with their familiy
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family
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today's
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with
work
because of which they are not able to give time
to their parents or grandparents. Due to which aged individuals
feel lonely and their physical health get weeker as they spend most of the time
in their home doing basic things which only helps them to spend time
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work-life
family
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the family
time
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the time
people
have forgotten about the person who are
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time
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, old people
feel lonly
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lonely
only
impact
on both mental and physical health.
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an impact
On the contrary
, there are various measures which can be taken to solve this
problem
like to get old age people
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enroll
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social
group which spend some Add an article
a social
time
discussing various things which will give them a good instinct that there is someone to talk with them. Likewise
, individuals
who are working should maintain work life
balance which will give them Add a hyphen
work-life
time
to spend time
with elder people
and they can have some quality time
. Furthermore
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people
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people
with them to support them. Thus
, there are various measures to overcome this
problem
and will help in solving this
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the
problem
.
To conclude, the amount of stress in Correct your spelling
today's
todays
modern era has increased because of which parents and grandparents feel their children are not providing Change to a genitive case
today's
time
to the but taking necessary steps can help sove
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solve
save
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problem
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