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The diagram explains the way in which salmon completed its life cycle. Overall, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with the hatches of eggs and ending up with spawns and dies.
First
of all, eggs in
fresh water
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hatches
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in about 3 months. Following
this
, alevin has been formed where feeds off yolk sac for several weeks and it turns into a Fry which underwent 5 to 10 weeks and just
swim
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in the
fresh water
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freshwater
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.
Next
, it became a Parr; in
this
stage
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it is about several months old.
Subsequently
, it develops finger markings. After that, will group and head out to the sea when reaches 1 to 3 years old and
this
is called Smolt.
Thereafter
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adult salmon will be formed after spending 1 to 8 years at the sea.
Finally
, it reaches the stage of becoming
spawning
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Adult where it spawns and dies
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2 weeks and the cycle will repeat over again.
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