You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter explain why you want to leave your current job describe what kind of job you are looking for ask for some help or advice

Dear Sathi, Hope

this

letter finds you very well. It's been a long time not talking with you. Today I am writing

this

letter to ask for some suggestions for a new job in the child care field. As you may know, recently I am working as a carer in the disability

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. It's been a long time since I am working as a helper in the Ashfield disability facility. Now I feel like I am stuck in

this

sector and want to change the work.

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nowadays I am experiencing back pain because of a long shift and haby work in the workplace. I

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finished my diploma in early childhood recently, and I am thinking of changing my career in Early childhood service. You have been in

this

field for five years,

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have a lot of experience, and know many

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. I really need your help to find me a good working environment in

this

field. It would be very helpful if you suggest to me some

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where I can apply for a job. As I am new here and haven't prepared my resume yet, you may give some ideas about the things that should be mentioned on the excellent resume. I look forward to hearing from you at your convenience time. Warm wishes

Jaanni

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Janani

Janni

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

219 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter explain why you want to leave your current job describe what kind of job you are looking for ask for some help or advice

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

In some countries , the government promote public transportation and discourage the private vehicles what are the advantage and disadvantages?

Some people think that old buildings should be knocked down. Do you agree or disagree?

some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at that they find most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.