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The diagram given illustrates

procedure

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sugar

production which can be separated into two groups, pre-production and on-production. It clearly

shown

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there are seven steps to transform

sugar

cane

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. Looking at the pre-production,

firstly

, the

sugar

cane must have been

planting

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at least twelve months, not over eighteen months.

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, the

manufactures

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will harvest

their

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produces by using two different methods, picking

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by truck or chopping

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human

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. Turning to on-production,

sugar

cane will be smashed by the machine until it becomes watery.

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step, to purify, the juice will be poured

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Limestone

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filter. After that, there is

method

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called 'Evaporator', making it

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more intense with the heat until it

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syrup.

Then

sugar

crystal will be apart from

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'Centrifuge'

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process. The

last

step is to dehydrate pieces of

sugar

Furthermore

, they have to cool it down as well. On the whole, there are numerous processes to produce

sugar

. The

first

group of procedures be able to archive by human compared to another group which has to

be depends

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on machines.

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