Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The diagram given illustrates
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the procedure
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of
sugar
production which can be separated into two groups, pre-production and on-production. It clearly
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there are seven steps to transform
sugar
cane
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sugar
. Looking at the pre-production,
firstly
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sugar
cane must have been
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at least twelve months, not over eighteen months.
Secondly
, the
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will harvest
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produces by using two different methods, picking
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by truck or chopping
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by
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. Turning to on-production,
sugar
cane will be smashed by the machine until it becomes watery.
Next
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step, to purify, the juice will be poured
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Limestone
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filter. After that, there is
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called 'Evaporator', making it
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more intense with the heat until it
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syrup.
Then
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in
'Centrifuge'
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process. The
last
step is to dehydrate pieces of
sugar
.
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, they have to cool it down as well. On the whole, there are numerous processes to produce
sugar
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first
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on machines.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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