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Some people say smoking should be banned on public places. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

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Nowadays smoking is a general trend of alcohol
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 cannot be prevented. It is fact that
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 smoke in place which disturbs the surrounding crowds.
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 essay agrees with the statement that avoiding smoking in public.
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 of all, smoking is injurious to health. It can affect both passive and active smokers. Despite the fact that smoking can damage their own health, it
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 has consequences for the
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 around them inhaling the toxic chemical. It is an open invitation to diseases like lung cancer ,tuberculosis and so on.
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, prevention can help the individual to restrict smoking, which not only helps them but
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 the
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 around them.
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, it can affect the environment through pollution. Even though pupils
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 tobacco, it will lead to creating waste in the surrounding through the plastic cover and cigar material like bud.
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, it can cause disaster incident like fire, as
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 after consuming tobacco tends to throw the cigarette without considering there is still a burning spark at the edge can cause a life of a human being as well as destroy the land. Another factor is that
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youngster
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try to imitate smoking by seeing other
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 .
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, it can spoil the future of teenagers by falling into addiction.
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, try banning cigarettes in public helps to lead the society healthier Some
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 argue that they pay tax and their rights have been violated as consuming
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the cigar is the only relief from stress. It is a completely wrong statement that there are various methods to relax like listening to music, playing sports or watching tv shows. In conclusion,
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 trying to avoid cigars may help the folk around them breathe natural air.
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, prevention helps in maintaining
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 clean and free from pollution.
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, there are
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 factor in banning smoking helps the society in these ways

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