Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nature's design and thousands of years of evolution have made
women
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better at
childcare
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than men. Even though
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might be a scientific fact, in today's world the
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work
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life
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of
women
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is equally important as their personal
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.
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, I completely disagree that
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should spend more time
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raising
children
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and sacrifice their
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life
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. Many solutions can help
women
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balance their
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and personal
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. A few examples are
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Flexible working hours and a Joint family system.
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, all corporates are working towards favourable working conditions for
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.
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includes having policies that will help
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not lose their job in order to concentrate on taking care of their
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.
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, giving freedom, by having flexible working hours and / or having a daycare centre at the office.
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will ease the pressure on a
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to have a balanced
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,
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is not only a
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's responsibility but a man's too. A husband should
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equally participate in
childcare
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which will reduce some burden on a
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. But,
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has limited benefits as the husband needs to go out to
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too. In
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scenario, it becomes important to once again embrace the joint family system. Having the entire family living together will not only help
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in sharing the
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to raise a child and household chores but
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help nurture
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because they will learn a lot from their grandparents and others. To conclude, in today's time
childcare
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is a job for both men and
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. I strongly disagree that only
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have to compromise. Certain assistance from corporates on policies and
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will reduce
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's stress levels.
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, taking care of
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by family members
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as husbands and grandparents will have huge benefits on a child's development and give more free time to a
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to focus on her
work
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • nurturing
  • empathy
  • sensitivity
  • maternal instinct
  • paternal involvement
  • child's development
  • work-life balance
  • gender equality
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