Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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society develops, the needs of each person are very different. So nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than
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families. It is an inevitable trend now but as personally
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and negative impact on communities.
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, why do the young people want to leave their family and choose to live alone or with their
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? The reason is they couldn’t be happy
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home where they were living.
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feel surprised or useless or uncomfortable… and they couldn’t make anything for themselves ( it is
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of each individual in today’s society ). And
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they have a conflict with their
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and their brother or their sister…The relatives couldn’t share their thoughts, their job, their concerns… around their lives. So they must choose to leave their home and find somewhere they feel anything better and live with anyone they feel
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happier than their family. When they leave their home and there were many
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around them and they must make
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a decision
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by themselves. It would be right and wrong anytime. Of course, they must pay for bad
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with money,
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, death or imprisonment… And they have a negative impact on communities. We can limit these bad things if they were better shared and guided by their loved ones, something they don't get when they live alone or with friends. So why can't their
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do it? do their
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not love them? Or what should their
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do to understand them better?... the good answer is their
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must talk to their children more and more and more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Erosion
  • Communal cohesion
  • Geographical dispersion
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Real estate dynamics
  • Psychological well-being
  • Technological facilitation
  • Independence
  • Traditional vs modern lifestyles
  • Intergenerational relationships
  • Virtual communities
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