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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts are showcasing the various mediums
of
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 accessing news in both Canada and
Australia
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.
Overall
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, the most popular means of seeking the latest information are TV and online.
However
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, a significant chunk of people
prefer
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 printed documents and a number of other odd modes for getting info about trending topics. Talking specifically
in
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Canadian
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the Canadian
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 perspective about 36
percent
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per cent
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 of
population
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the population
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 is habitual of visiting web platforms to keep them informed about the things happening around them.
Whereas
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, the percentage of internet learning enthusiasts in
Australia
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 is 52%.
However
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, the proportion of Television viewers in Canada is 40 % which is marginally above
to
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that of its Australian counterparts. The print media users in
Australia
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 are only 7%, which is exactly half
to
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that of its comparison maker.
Moreover
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, the habit of listening to
radio
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the radio
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 is
also
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 limited to
extremely
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 tiny proportion of people and
that is
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 around 2% in
Australia
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 and 7% in
the
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other country. Alongside, these four popular options a number of other resources are
also
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 used in these nations, and they make up
to
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about 3% and 2% in Canada and
Australia
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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