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The three diagrams showcase the modifications that made at West
Park
 Secondary
School
 since its building in 1950. In general, the main changes had taken place in the western territory of the diagram in all three years and the
school
 building had not altered apart, during the years. In terms of the
first
 diagram, in 1950, houses had occupied approximately a quarter zone. But when it had come in 1980, the car
park
 and science block constructions had been built as a replacement for houses. In 2010, the car
park
 had obsessed a massive locality of the western field. Farmland had been removed in both 1980 and 2010 because of the sports field and car
park
. The other notable changes involve
school
. In 1950, the
school
 had been a single, but, in 1980 and 2010, the
school
 had been altered as the
school
's main building
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1980 and 2010. The sports field and playground had been bigger in 1950 and 1980, but, in 2010, these had been diminished.
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