the diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps illustrate

about

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apply

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the changes

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West Park Secondary school

since

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from

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1950 to 1980 and to 2010

Overall

it is clear that

the main road remained in place over the given period of time and It is

also

apparent that the school was developed and increased in size

while

areas of the

sports

field

and playground decreased.

To begin

, there were three rows of houses in 1950 which were converted into

car

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a car

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parking

lot

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lots

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and

science

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a science

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block

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blocks

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in 1980. There was farmland near the houses in 1950 but it was altered into a

sports

field

in 1980. The

sports

field

was

then

being

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replaced by a bigger area for car parking in 2010.

Furthermore

, the school in 1950 had one large

block

which later on took an additional

block

called

science

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the science

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block

. After the emergence of the science

block

, there was no place for housing. The playground area remained unchanged from 1950 to 1980 but was reduced in size as the remaining area was used as a

sports

field

in 2010.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, field, block with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

172 words

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