Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The better the development of digital technology, the more
games
, and television
programs
are produced.
Besides
some advantageous
programs
,
people
are worried about their violent
content
can damage society seriously by increasing the criminal rate and ruining the young generation.
On the other hand
, other
people
including me strongly believe that these innovations can positively change the
behavior
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behaviour
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of
people
. On one hand, TV
programs
and computer
games
which contain brutal
content
are usually believed to be the cause of some
people
committing crimes. Those
programs
usually contain bloodstained scenes, and violent action;
therefore
, many
people
can be influenced and redo what they saw.
For example
, combat in an action movie can lead
people
, especially children to imitate and cause a fight in real life. More important, because some countries have bad censorship, children can easy to access and be affected by spoiled
content
. Most violent
programs
and
games
are censored
content
that has an age restriction for adults only;
however
, by the internet insecurity,
this
content
is considered ubiquitous,
therefore
many teenagers can access them before being coincidently negatively affected.
In contrast
, I believe many characters in
this
category are exemplary, so
people
can learn their good characteristics. Several violent scenes on TV and in
games
are related to reality.;
therefore
, many
people
tend to sympathize with the circumstance of the involved characters.
For example
, after watching “John Wick” – a movie related to the assassination and brutal fights, many
people
sympathize with the main character when he loses everything related to his dead wife;
therefore
,
people
understand the agony of losing their relatives. In conclusion, I strongly believed that violent
games
can change
people
’s
behavior
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in a positive way
besides
having some mentioned bad effects that many
people
have considered.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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