The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of the three kinds of nutrients( sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar) in four types of meals, which are all extremely unhealthy
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our human body.
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, people eat the highest proportion of bad nutrients
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dinner
,
follow
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by those
of
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snacks, lunch, and breakfast. Despite people
ate
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dinner
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with higher percentages of sodium and saturated fat than others, they ate more added sugar in snacks. The percentages of sodium in several kinds of meals(
dinner
, lunch, snack, breakfast) are 43%, 29%, 14%, and 14%, respectively. Those of
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fat have
the
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similar kinds of proportions
compare
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to the first one.
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situation when it comes to added sugar, people ate more of it in snacks (42%) than in
dinner
(23%), lunch(19%), and breakfast(16%), respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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